Thanks Catherine I take not of your comments and will work on this some more
bw Sallyj
>From: catherine JF <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub Pack instinct
>Date: Tue, 24 Aug 2004 10:58:47 +0100
>
>Hello Sally - I have taken liberties here and bracketed the lines I think
>the poem could do without. It stands strong enough to lose the explanatory
>authorial remarks and is a lovely metaphor; tactile and moving.
>
>Best wishes
>
>Catherine
>
>
>
> Pack instinct
>
> (It is all so primitive and pagan.)
> They are my lost cubs
> (and) I want to lick them better
> heal wounds civilisation and cruel men have inflicted.
> I see scratches on their souls
> (and) wounds so deep
> that even my grandmother's tongue
> cannot reach.
> Distance could never hide my anguish
> of cubs lost to an alien world
> but now we are united again
> I can lick their sores
> bathe them in water too pure for rats
> groom their fur and let their paws
> touch my eyes, my ears, my nose.
> We nuzzle together
> a bundle of warm bodies
> (All so primitive and primeval
> this repairing of bonds)
> eating together from the same bowl
> sniffing around for familiar scents
> So (pagan and) peaceful
> (this natural existence
> that the civilised world
> cannot, does not
> and will never, understand.)
>
> Sally James
>
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