Thanks a lot James, Yes you are right as Christina suggested Sally J


>From: James Bell <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub Pack instinct
>Date: Sat, 21 Aug 2004 13:04:59 +0000
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>Hi Sally,
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>It is good to put poems aside for a while. With this one I'd suggest a 
>prune without losing anything from the poem. Remove the first line and 
>finish the poem on "a bundle of warm bodies" is how I would see it for this 
>is the crux of the poem; and leave the reader to decide about the primitive 
>and pagan aspect for this is telling us too much.
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>bw
>James
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>>From: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: new sub Pack instinct
>>Date: Thu, 19 Aug 2004 09:16:20 +0100
>>
>>This is a poem I wrote a few years ago and have revised a little
>>
>>
>>Pack instinct
>>
>>It is all so primitive and pagan.
>>They are my lost cubs
>>and I want to lick them better
>>heal wounds civilisation and cruel men have inflicted.
>>I see scratches on their souls
>>and wounds so deep
>>that even my grandmother’s tongue
>>cannot reach.
>>Distance could never hide my anguish
>>of cubs lost to an alien world
>>but now we are united again
>>I can lick their sores
>>bathe them in water too pure for rats
>>groom their fur and let their paws
>>touch my eyes, my ears, my nose.
>>We nuzzle together
>>a bundle of warm bodies
>>All so primitive and primeval
>>this repairing of bonds
>>eating together from the same bowl
>>sniffing around for familiar scents
>>So pagan and peaceful
>>this natural existence
>>that the civilised world
>>cannot, does not
>>and will never, understand.
>>
>>Sally James
>>
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