Hi Christina,
I'm thinking hard about the mention of both God & angels! I, too, might
prefer one or the other. I know the poem is playing with either/or but God &
angels isn't either/or, it's both!
I'm also thinking about the rosebuds! I like them appearing - but I don't
jump on recognising their significance... but that seems OK to me! I can
enjoy letting the word chose its own associations with the maze that is my
mind... I come up with interesting links!
The indented first lines are also subtle ways of indicating pauses before
the thought emerges...
It's also very interesting that you've written this in the present tense:
for me that really adds to it's power.
And the last line is so powerful!
Bob


>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Cradle Song (first draft)
>Date: Sat, 14 Aug 2004 08:08:59 EDT
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>Cradle Song
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>         I imagine my mother's  arms
>holding her belly, her  breasts
>swollen with  milk.  She's singing  ---
>I thought it was  Schubert
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>         but it's Brahms --- the  lullaby.
>There are  rosebuds.  Waking
>is  God's will.  Angels watch  us.
>She prays for a  boy.
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>christina  fletcher

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