Thanks Bob, much flattered by comparison to Keats! Especially after I bashed
your statues about!
We were out with friends (Colin and Jane) - for semantic reasons it became
'your beach'.
 perhaps needs a sub heading.
As I said to Ryf, this way of "rhyming" with varied assonant end syllabes
does seem to bring out the richness...
best
SallyE



on 9/8/04 12:00 pm, Bob Cooper at [log in to unmask] wrote:

> Hi Sally,
>
> At first when I read this - and it's the fruit and the style of writinbg
> that did this - I thought of Keats!
>
> And now I'm too lazy to check to see if he had a friend called Jane...
> It could be some other 200 year ago poet, tho... But his love of fruit (and
> jam!) seems to single him out, identify him.
>
> Why let all the old guys keep all the best themes to themselves, eh?
>
> But I might be wrong because it says "your beach" and I'm not sure that fits
> with how I've been thinking...
>
> Bob
>
>
>> From: Sally Evans <[log in to unmask]>
>> Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>> To: [log in to unmask]
>> Subject: More fruit picking: Shore Gooseberries
>> Date: Sun, 8 Aug 2004 22:20:30 +0100
>>
>> Shore Gooseberries
>>
>> Along your beach where tide's plash-wavelets drown,
>> cliff fresh above, a grass-bank scissor-torn
>> abandons salt sand-pebbles, fossiled stone,
>> where the heath-track runs through the burnlet's dene.
>>
>> By tufted grass and ragged rose-hip, thorn,
>> lone gooseberry-tree these golden globes adorn,
>> unseen before they ripened out of green,
>> guards the old path, but now its wealth is known.
>>
>> Attack is imminent, the fruit falls down
>> as we marauding children backward grown
>> make good our gain from branches' prickled crown,
>> appropriate the berries not the scene,
>>
>> retreat with sweet ingredients for cuisine,
>> to share, like memories, with you and Jane.
>>
>> Sally Evans
>
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