Ann, a good read but I want it trimmed. here
Could feel the darkness
sweeping over the face of the deep.
Could taste the iron behind clenched teeth
Hear Trolls whispering.
maybe
Could feel darkness
sweep over the face of the deep.
Could taste the iron behind clenched teeth
Hear trolls whisper.
Small changes, fewer articles and ings. More music? To me, but I may be
tone-deaf.
Thanks.
Gary
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