Thanks Ryfkah. There has been lots of comments about the first four lines so
will work on this, bw Sally j
>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub any port
>Date: Tue, 3 Aug 2004 22:39:21 EDT
>
>In a message dated 07/30/2004 10:41:37 PM, [log in to unmask] writes:
>
><< In the grey stone wall of the morning
>
>I search for you >>
>
>I love this opening; maybe a stanza break for enjambment with the next,
>might
>be powerful.
>
>kol tuv, Ryfkah
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