Thanks Gary, yes I see what you mean. bw sally j
>From: Gary Blankenship <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub any port Sally J
>Date: Sun, 1 Aug 2004 07:10:21 -0700
>
>Sally, I like the read and theme, but can see another way
>
>In the grey stone wall of the morning
>I search for you
>but in the blushing pink of sky
>I see nothing
>This is a new day beginning
>excitement flutters on a blackbird's wing
>and damp flowers uncurl
>
>might be
>
>In the grey stone wall of the morning
>I search for you,
>in the blushing pink of sky
>I see nothing
>
>A new day begins,
>excitement flutters on a blackbird's wing,
>damp flowers uncurl
>
>There is an ache to these early hours
>etc
>
>a bit of punc, a couple of words cut, stanzas, and a word change or 3
>
>Smiles and Thanks.
>
>Gary
>
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