Sally, I like the read and theme, but can see another way
In the grey stone wall of the morning
I search for you
but in the blushing pink of sky
I see nothing
This is a new day beginning
excitement flutters on a blackbird's wing
and damp flowers uncurl
might be
In the grey stone wall of the morning
I search for you,
in the blushing pink of sky
I see nothing
A new day begins,
excitement flutters on a blackbird's wing,
damp flowers uncurl
There is an ache to these early hours
etc
a bit of punc, a couple of words cut, stanzas, and a word change or 3
Smiles and Thanks.
Gary
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