Hi Christina,
yeh, this works!
A couple of suggestions (well, three actually).
Miss off the first two words!!! (I don't think we need them for the poem)
A full stop after flies.
And (whaddya think) start the last stanza with an "and" (which seems to 
soften the link you're making...) and miss off the full stop at the end of 
the previous stanza. I know ands ain't always popular but there might be a 
case for one here. Whaddya think?
Bob


>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New sub:  Wood Pigeon (first draft)
>Date: Fri, 23 Jul 2004 09:09:22 EDT
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>Wood Pigeon
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>By morning his corpse  lay under a bush
>and I’d a  mind to watch him  decompose
>to know the  movement from feathered flesh
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>         to delicate skeleton.   But they say he’ll bring blow  flies,
>eggs turn to maggots  and death’s too  close
>to waste time  watching wasps feast on dead pigeons.
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>         I’m thinking of my mother’s  fresh, new dress,
>cold  hands’ rings on warm fabric, the  glimpse
>of brown and  purple skin, almost hidden.
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>         christina  fletcher

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