no evidence it was loved
as Ted Ted on the highest shelf
of your room.
Colin, I like the theme, this as a tribute to child, sibling? We might want
to know.
You should look at punc. It is a bit ragged.
And I think it is too long, that you could as well at half or less.
Finally, I would to longer lines - 8 to 10 count, which will help line
length and read.
Smiles and thanks.
Gary
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