Hi Gary,
Interesting take on the theme of angels...
Tho one of the big questions I ask of an emerging poem is: "Is this poem
focused?" - and I'm not sure this one is...
I might feel happier if this were about just one angel... (in the title and
in the poem!)
I might feel happier if I could feel there was some kind of progress or
progression in the images - at the moment they feel too random - but if the
images were themselves more focused then I might feel there was some deeper
sense holding them together.
.. And I'm not sure about the link between the passing angel and poetry -
are you indulging youself here? (And when I find angel and poetry linked I
think of Rilke - and that doesn't help me here!)
Bob
Bob, interesting points. I need to think on them, but also need to let this
poem set and mellow.
Random? I really need to ponder this one.
One angel? That is easy. I'll stay with a couple.
Poetry? More than fair. I have an excuse but it is probably not good
enough.
Thanks very much for the thoughts and fine crit.
Smiles.
Gary
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