Would it be stronger if it wern't "a tourist" but actually the narrator?
(ie, I think it would...)
And would the poem be stronger if it were presented in couplets (where each
couplet presented each image?). Maybe I'm thinking like this because I'm
thinking "art needs a frame to become art" and I'm feeling pretty ruthless
today...
Bob
Bob, thanks. Perhaps. All of my bits probably can be stronger. Most is of
it is couplets, but I like the change in form at the end.
The narrator may not want to admit he was a tourist!
Smiles.
Gary
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