Thanks Matt, footloose also describes the person too. Sally J


>From: "Merritt, Matt - Leic. Mercury"
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>Subject: Re: new sub In my dreams/Sally J
>Date: Fri, 16 Jul 2004 08:43:40 +0100
>
>Hi Sally,
>I have to admit that on first reading, "footless" pulled me up short, but
>on
>second thoughts I think it does the things you suggest. I thought it also
>suggested "footloose", which reinforces the sense of absence nicely.
>Nice poem, and I agree entirely with Colin's PS.
>Regards,
>Matt
>
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>Subject: Re: new sub In my dreams/Sally J
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>Colin, This is weird because the words you picked "steady" and "saunter"
>fits the personality of the person who is no longer here. I picked the word
>"footless" to give a feeling of absence and whispers because this has a
>feeling of sadness and quietness. Sally J
>
>
> >From: hui dewar <[log in to unmask]>
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> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: Re: new sub In my dreams/Sally J
> >Date: Thu, 15 Jul 2004 21:05:30 +0100
> >
> >Sally,
> >
> >It's a fine poem and there's not much I would change here. However
> >lines 5 and 6 are not quite right for me. Please see text for suggs -
> >but if not those replacement words there are many others that might be
> >better.
> >
> >BW
> >
> >Colin
> >
> >PS  For such a well-worked subject you have done well to find a
> >neglected aspect, the transition between hopeless "searching" and more
> >detached reminiscence.
> >
> >
> >----- Original Message -----
> >From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: <[log in to unmask]>
> >Sent: Thursday, July 15, 2004 3:05 AM
> >Subject: new sub In my dreams
> >
> >
> >In my dreams
> >
> >I no longer search in faceless crowds
> >and hover round the silent phone
> >or pine for mailings never sent
> >and stare outside from windowpanes
> >or listen for the STEADY boot
> >that SAUNTERS down the grassy path
> >Nor do I visit age-old haunts
> >re- capturing the love that's lost
> >Instead I curl up with my books
> >I tend my garden, walk the dogs
> >and sit on benches in the shade
> >and close my eyes and think of him
> >
> >Who vanished like he'd never been
> >for what once was real is now a dream.
> >
> >
> >
> >Sally James
> >
> >
> >ORIGINAL
> >
> >
> >In my dreams
> >
> >I no longer search in faceless crowds
> >and hover round the silent phone
> >or pine for mailings never sent
> >and stare outside from windowpanes
> >or listen for the footless boot
> >that whispers down the grassy path
> >Nor do I visit age-old haunts
> >re- capturing the love that's lost
> >Instead I curl up with my books
> >I tend my garden, walk the dogs
> >and sit on benches in the shade
> >and close my eyes and think of him
> >
> >Who vanished like he'd never been
> >for what once was real is now a dream.
> >
> >
> >
> >Sally James
> >
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