Thanks. And I was wondering if billowing was a word that you could use for
the cape or swirling - if you wanted to choose a word that was cheerfully
over the top and hence a bit ironic, or you might go for a drabber word if
you wanted to make the policeman less formidable - but then you know this
already,
Colin
----- Original Message -----
From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Monday, July 19, 2004 2:16 PM
Subject: Re: new sub Mr Plod/Sally J
> Thank you Colin for reading my poem and still liking it after a few
> readings. I sometimes wonder were these sort of poems come from. I did see
a
> policeman walking in town in the rain and thought how odd. They are
usually
> in twos and in a car. There is a lot of binge and underage drinking around
> this area and I thought of when I was young and if I saw the bobby walking
> the streets how it scared me. In those days as youngsters we got caned in
> school and smacked at home if we mis-behaved. The local bobby would be
there
> to give the added sense of discipline when we were not in school or at
home
> or in Sunday school. But times cahnge. Sally J
>
>
> >From: hui dewar <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: Re: new sub Mr Plod/Sally J
> >Date: Sat, 17 Jul 2004 16:54:14 +0100
> >
> >Sally J,
> >
> >I've read this a few times and still like it, even if it does run the
risk
> >of being a political poem. I like it because it is clear and economical
in
> >it's use of language at the same time as capturing a complex social
> >problem.
> >Reading the poem I ought to have problem working out that the first
person
> >is a policeman (for whom the poem allows some sympathy) and the second
lot
> >of people are rascals. But I don't. So I guess you have got excellent
cues
> >in the poem, that trigger those series of associations. You might
consider
> >ROUND instead of AROUND because it runs better IMO. "Swaying" would be
> >another word to put under the magnifying glass. Not saying that it has to
> >go, but there might be another word that applies better to how a cloak
> >moves
> >at the same time as conjuring ludicrous vulnerability.
> >
> >As an aside, it may be interesting to consider that there are plenty of
> >countries where the police would take the youths off to a locked facility
> >for a few days, beat them blue and red and then return them to the
streets,
> >if they were cheeky to the police. In such countries what seems to happen
> >is
> >that the vicious youths disappear. They join the police instead, because
> >of
> >the opportunities for violence.
> >
> >BW
> >
> >Colin
> >
> >
> >----- Original Message -----
> >From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: <[log in to unmask]>
> >Sent: Saturday, July 17, 2004 4:26 AM
> >Subject: new sub Mr Plod
> >
> >
> >Mr Plod
> >
> >I saw him today, walking the streets
> >on his own, getting wet,
> >his cape swaying like batman's
> >his helmet making him look seven feet tall
> >
> >"Quick put out the spliff
> >hide the cider
> >look in the shop window
> >that guys a big bugger
> >I wonder if he has a truncheon under his cape
> >hand cuffs in his pocket
> >wears a bullet proof vest
> >
> >Even if he has
> >he can't clip us around the ear-hole
> >give us a kick up the backside
> >six of the best
> >a sharp short shock
> >come to think of it no one can
> >so light me a spliff
> >pass the cider
> >nick that car
> >kids rule now
> >O.K."
> >
> >sally james
> >
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