No worries,
Colin
----- Original Message -----
From: "Frank" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Sunday, July 18, 2004 1:18 PM
Subject: Re: sub - loss of a rosella - repost/Frank - Colin
> Hi Colin,
>
> Don't think I've responded yet, though I've been thinking about it.
>
> I think I have to leave the word 'Rosella' to sell itself. The key colours
> of the bird are red, yellow, blue and green, but the range of colour
> combinations across the sub-species is just enormous. They are all,
however,
> quite beautiful, and an emblem of Australia. When I tried to find a
picture
> online, I was very disappointed withwhat was offered, so there's little I
> can do to rectify the situation.
>
> I'll consider 'anymore' on revision.
>
> Cheers,
>
>
> frank
>
>
> > Frank,
> >
> > Thanks for reposting. I like this poem and it's management of text and
sub
> > text is handsomely done for such a short poem. Now "Rosella"? To
describe
> it
> > properly or to leave the word Rosella to speak for itself? If I saw this
> > bird everyday the I would want the latter. But if I don't know the bird
> then
> > the task might be to summarise it - and I'm wondering if "beautiful
bird
> of
> > colours" falls between 2 stools. It's superfluous for people who already
> > know what it looks like and inadequate for people that don't. It might
be
> > possible to get round this problem by speaking to the metaphor e.g. by
> > saying instead, "such a beautiful bird".
> >
> > You might also get away with deleting the word "anymore" from the poem.
> >
> > BW
> >
> > Colin
> >
> >
> > ----- Original Message -----
> > From: "Frank" <[log in to unmask]>
> > To: <[log in to unmask]>
> > Sent: Thursday, July 15, 2004 3:51 AM
> > Subject: sub - loss of a rosella - repost
> >
> >
> > > Hi Colin,
> > >
> > > Repost, as requested.
> > >
> > > Cheers,
> > >
> > >
> > > Frank
> > >
> > > ~~~~~~~~~~
> > >
> > > loss of a rosella
> > >
> > > I have seen a rosella
> > > beautiful bird of colours
> > > standing on the roadside
> > > too close
> > >
> > > too close
> > >
> > > until the end
> > > seems somehow inevitable
> > >
> > > when its mate has gone
> > > the bird doesn't know
> > > how to live
> > > anymore
> > >
> > > I feel your absence
> > > like loss of the good part
> > > of myself
> > >
> > > I don't wonder how
> > > to go on
> > > I wonder
> > > why
> > >
> > > ~
> >
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