Thanks for the comments Hui. 16th June is the day Leopold Bloom in James
Joyce's Ullysess takes his walk round Dublin so has a particular
significance.
bw
James
>From: hui dewar <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: Sixteenth Of June/James
>Date: Sun, 11 Jul 2004 18:11:06 +0100
>
>James,
>
>A nice wee poem and I thought it flowed well on the whole. Herewith some
>minor suggestions to use or lose as you see fit:
>
>
>you reach the hiatus of a blank page
>as images APPEAR,
>
> the Canada geese STILL
>on their patch of estuary sand
> with the tide well out
>
> and the trickle of a river
> going by in this heat -
> nothing holds, you find no focus
>
> though you try to pin down the feeling
> as the geese enter the water to cool down
>
> you realise June is a short month
> and are tempted to buy those books
> you saw in the the bookstore in town
>
> realise too that it's Bloomsday
> and are now ready to enter
> another narrative THAN THIS.
> >
> >
> >
>
>I AM BIT UNCERTAIN ABOUT "BLOOMSDAY", ALTHOUGH IT MAY HAVE SPECIAL
>SIGNIFICANCE FOR YOU. HOW ABOUT, FRIDAY OR SUMMER OR EVENING ETC, SOMETHING
>ELSE THAT CAPTURES WHAT YOU WANT TO SAY ABOUT THE TIME BUT COULD ALSO HAVE
>WIDER SIGNIFICANCE?
>
>BW
>
>Colin
>
>
>
>
>
>
>----- Original Message -----
>From: "James Bell" <[log in to unmask]>
>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>Sent: Saturday, July 10, 2004 10:12 AM
>Subject: New sub: Sixteenth Of June
>
>ORIGINAL
>
>
> > A little late but there we are.
> >
> > SIXTEENTH OF JUNE
> >
> > you reach the hiatus of a blank page
> > as images impact on the eyes
> >
> > the Canada geese are still here
> > still on their patch of estuary sand
> > with the tide well out
> >
> > and the trickle of a river
> > going by in this heat -
> > nothing holds, you find no focus
> >
> > though you try to pin down the feeling
> > as the geese enter the water to cool down
> >
> > you realise June is a short month
> > and are tempted to buy those books
> > you saw in the the bookstore in town
> >
> > realise too that it's Bloomsday
> > and are now ready to enter
> > another narrative other than this.
> >
> >
> >
> > bw
> > James
> >
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