Ryfkah,
I like the juxtaposition of the everyday and the sublime in this poem.
Colin
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From: "catherine JF" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Wednesday, July 14, 2004 11:06 AM
Subject: Re: New: Ordinary Day
Hello Ryfkah - my only suggestion for this elegant and incisive piece is
that you maybe remove 'in the middle east' from the last line and put it in
the title instead.
Best wishes
Catherine
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>Ordinary Day
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>the angel Uriel illuminates the room
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>I regard orchid morning glories
>wait for coffee to brew
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>message: next year there will be peace
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>for breakfast soy bacon
>crisps in the microwave
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>a bush burns brilliantly in the backyard
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>the sea layers the sky
>gray permeates the day
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>the light vanishes
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>I sample my cafeŽau lait
>muse over today's bombing in the Middle East
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>Ryfkah 6/19/04
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