Thanks for your reading Catherine, no one else had commented on this one. 
Yes It is a bit jerky doesn't flow very well was a bit aware of this when I 
posted it. Will work on it, Sally J

>From: catherine JF <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New Sub Nanny and the gas mantle
>Date: Tue, 13 Jul 2004 15:34:19 +0000
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>Hi Sally - Wonderful ending.  I found the line breaks hard to follow though 
>and some of the punctuation seemed a bit random.  I'm not one to criticize 
>though - my punctuation is improving a bit but only because I'm teaching 
>basic skills now!
>
>Definitely one worth working on.
>
>Catherine
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>>From: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: New Sub Nanny and the gas mantle
>>Date: Tue, 8 Jun 2004 17:28:05 +0100
>>
>>I don't seem to be able to stop writing at the moment so sorry to bother 
>>you all but here is another
>>
>>
>>Nanny and the gas mantle
>>
>>“We’re going electric” she declared
>>and pulled the mantle down to light
>>watched the yellow skulk
>>across the ceiling, walls
>>faces laugh in whitewashed cracks
>>heard a hiss uncurl around the room
>>the firelight flare with added glee
>>Her rolled up sleeves showed thin brown arms
>>bright blue veins which throbbed
>>against her wrists
>>Her lips the tallor of coal tar, chirped
>>“Tomorrow I will press a switch”
>>then pushed the pipe up to the rose
>>sniffed hard, then sat me on her knee
>>Next night, another light enhanced the room
>>but the gassy smell still hung around the house
>>clung to curtains, books and chairs
>>and nanny too as she wondered
>>at the spark within the glass
>>that swayed upon a twist of flex
>>and dangled like a captured star.
>>
>>sally james
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>>As if the furniture had absorbed it
>>and each swirl of the net curtains
>>sent  wafts around the room
>>even her books wouldn’t let go
>>and saturated the pages.
>>
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