Sally,

I find this amusing and the connections between the subject matter and the
metaphor are rich and interesting. There is a sadness in it too which is not
lessened by the detached tone. I did wonder if the poem has to balance
uneasily between having staying true to the subject and having fun with all
the possible connections. "The sole ripped out of her " leads into one of
the punniest bits of the poem and I find myself jumping back and forth
between the humour and the pathos of it without  sending the closeness of
the two as much as in other parts of the poem. BTW I note that you have
opted out of punctuation in this poem which means that I have to fall back
on the capitals to organise it as I read (and was able to without
difficulty). One query would be why there is not a capital for now at the
beginning of L12. Thanks for the read.

BW

Colin


----- Original Message -----
From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Thursday, July 01, 2004 7:24 PM
Subject: new sub match made in heaven


> I found this poem today. Thought it topical
>
>
> Match made in heaven?
>
> She was in the Premier division
> had team spirit
> felt alive and kicking
> Theirs was a perfect match
> till one of them played away
> was game for anything
> Now she is on the transfer list
> the sole ripped out of her
> dragged through the mud
> by a  missing stud
> He moved the goal posts too far
> now he pays the penalty
> Nets flutter dirty and torn
> On the sideboard a yellow card
> not red
> Cobwebs drape corners
> and the new player
> is not a good substitute.
>
> Sally James
>
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