Shalom James,
Sometimes I write in lc because the poem dictates it. See comments below
please.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 06/21/2004 4:48:33 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< relics
religion likes relics [do you need the two oftens?]
often bones
often worn and ancient
likes the relic words of the bone's owners [like this image]
fixed in binding patterns
preserved by writing and reciting [nice rhyme]
so it is often difficult to know [this seems your weakest stanza – it does
not speak as vibrantly as the others]
if the day will be fine and new
a time of praise and celebration
in imitation of the old ways
though without the bones
the worn and ancient relics
and not preserved by
writing and reciting [I like the circle of words made from beginning stanza
to end of poem]
until the fineness is blunted
into another dogma
to become merely a relic
of yesterday >> [clever ending – not quite sure of relic of yesterday]
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