Yes, that sounds much better Sally. It has too something of the famous train
poem by Edward Thomas, the name escapes me for the moment.
bw
James
>From: Sally Evans <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New Poem: DId I ever go to Heptonstall?
>Date: Sat, 12 Jun 2004 20:41:03 +0100
>
>Yes I'm not sure 'declamatory' is a p[articularly good tone. If we can make
>it matra-esque and relaxed at the same time, it might work
>bw
>SallyE
>
>on 12/6/04 11:13 am, James Bell at [log in to unmask] wrote:
>
> > Hi Sally,
> >
> > I like the grand tone in this poem as if calling to the people you
>mention
> > beyond the grave so to speak. The word I need to describe it is
> > declacmatory.
> >
> >
> >
> > bw
> > James
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >> From: Sally Evans <[log in to unmask]>
> >> Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >> To: [log in to unmask]
> >> Subject: New Poem: DId I ever go to Heptonstall?
> >> Date: Fri, 4 Jun 2004 20:32:07 +0100
> >>
> >> Did I ever go to Heptonstall?
> >>
> >> note: this poem has been a long time coming. I am grateful to Sally J
>for
> >> catalysiing it with her new poem Heptonstall Church Yard, which I
>enjoyed
> >> very much.
> >>
> >> SallyE
> >>
> >>
> >> Did I ever go to Heptonstall?
> >>
> >> Did I ever go to Heptonstall
> >> to look for the twentieth century girl
> >> whose battled words meant love of death
> >> or was I there in search of those
> >> harder to find, perhaps no less
> >> plunged in truth-destroying myth?
> >>
> >> What is there about these moors
> >> turns up three fateful sisters, whose
> >> brother holds the villain's card
> >> one century, then another one and a half
> >> hundred years on, a woman writer and a man,
> >> he local, she incomer, the worse tangled?
> >>
> >> Yet another religion based on
> >> goddesses and gods of literature,
> >> uncontrollable emotion, rage turned
> >> into words, love turned into rage, passion
> >> turned into something else that lingers
> >> in charged, walled burial plots?
> >>
> >> What is it and what are they
> >> that both console and stop us short,
> >> us their readers, women and men
> >> of pen, church, vocation, keyboard,
> >> desires untamed because untameable,
> >> or fears unnamed because unnameable?
> >>
> >> What darkness yet in the names,
> >> Plath, Charlotte, Emily, Syvlia,
> >> Ted, Brontë, Branwell, Hughes,
> >> Howarth and Heptonstall?
> >> Is it ghosts, relief, hysteria,
> >> handed-on passion, or nothing at all?
> >>
> >> Sally Evans
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> on 4/6/04 6:30 pm, Sally James at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> >>
> >>> Heptonstall churchyard
> >>>
> >>> Some bizarre twist of fate brought me here
> >>> to this place, this grave of woman’s weeping
> >>> The day was sunny, the blossom swayed
> >>> lent its perfume to the moor land wind
> >>> but by the church,
> >>> great gusts carried my breath away
> >>> tangled my hair, blew my skirt above my knees
> >>> I don’t know why I came at all
> >>> I was out for pleasure, to see the countryside
> >>> look for somewhere new to hang my hat
> >>> The church tower looked fierce
> >>> frowned, as I trod the cobbles
> >>> the narrow streets
> >>> searched the tipsy grave stones
> >>> that leaned port side in the
> >>> early summer’s howl
> >>> I had to ask of course
> >>> “Many visitors come,” he said
> >>> then pointed, told me
> >>> where the woman lay
> >>> But today, there was only me
> >>> pacing up and down the ranks
> >>> inspecting, looking for the poet
> >>> whose petals bloomed in fiercest flames
> >>> I found the plot at last
> >>> and tears erupted, spilled
> >>> upon her flowered bed
> >>> and as I cried, the church bell tolled
> >>> Three times.
> >>>
> >>> sally james
> >>>
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