Calya,
REally glad you liked this one as I've tried several versions. Maybe this is
the winner. I will too use your additional word.
bw
James
>From: calaya <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: Flawed Sonnet
>Date: Fri, 4 Jun 2004 13:24:19 -0700
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>I like this, James. Really good opening line- great imagry. It stands alone
>well for me. I was pleased with where it went: nice. But I'd add one word,
>if I were you. See * below, and think about it.
>thnaks for it
>calaya
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>Your are myth beyond the bone,
>a contention that sings in a voice like Puck
>or any other mischevious fellow
>though you are not a fellow.
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>You are unattainable,
>a distance that cannot reach out;
>a fine point on a hair trigger
>who meets me at the extremes of thought
>as an island in a sea of impossibilities,
>continually struck by the storms of reason
>that contain you within fairy tales and legends,
>whose provenance is lost in hidden moral and meaning.
>
>(*Still) We must remain for the performance today
>and tomorrow and then for a season.
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