Thank you Bob. I am glad you like it. It was more or less as it happened and
how I felt at the time so guess that is why it may work.The cap on Three was
intentional but you are right so will change it. Thanks sally J
>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub Heptonstall church yard
>Date: Wed, 9 Jun 2004 00:13:20 +0000
>
>Hi Sally,
>I've enjoyed reading this - and I can't say that about every poem I've read
>that's been written about that particular graveyard...
>What I think I like is the way you don't get overwhelmed in the poem by all
>the great poetic things that could be said but, instead, let your poem tell
>its own story.
>I assume that the Cap on "Three" in the last line is a typo... (it works
>well without it IMO).
>Bob
>
>
>>From: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: new sub Heptonstall church yard
>>Date: Fri, 4 Jun 2004 18:30:47 +0100
>>
>>Heptonstall churchyard
>>
>>Some bizarre twist of fate brought me here
>>to this place, this grave of woman’s weeping
>>The day was sunny, the blossom swayed
>>lent its perfume to the moor land wind
>>but by the church,
>>great gusts carried my breath away
>>tangled my hair, blew my skirt above my knees
>>I don’t know why I came at all
>>I was out for pleasure, to see the countryside
>>look for somewhere new to hang my hat
>>The church tower looked fierce
>>frowned, as I trod the cobbles
>>the narrow streets
>>searched the tipsy grave stones
>>that leaned port side in the
>>early summer’s howl
>>I had to ask of course
>>“Many visitors come,” he said
>>then pointed, told me
>>where the woman lay
>>But today, there was only me
>>pacing up and down the ranks
>>inspecting, looking for the poet
>>whose petals bloomed in fiercest flames
>>I found the plot at last
>>and tears erupted, spilled
>>upon her flowered bed
>>and as I cried, the church bell tolled
>>Three times.
>>
>>sally james
>>
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