Hi Sue.
Thank you.
Sorry about the poor punctuation - even I usually do better than that,
though it underlines why I tend to leave it well alone. Have made the
correction. Will look at the tense change that you suggest.
Glad you enjoyed the piece.
Regards,
Frank
> Frank, I like his poem, perhaps because I have shared the feeling. Change
> it's to its. You might try present tense. I think it would be more
immediate
> and convincing to start that way.
> I especially like the ending. Sue
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