>From: grasshopper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New: Daisies
>Date: Thu, 3 Jun 2004 12:39:14 +0100
>
>Dear Ryfkah,
> I don't think we need to be told that a cemetery is a monument to death-
>I
>think that's a given.
>I hesitate to mention this issue again, but I do think this poem would be
>greatly improved by standard punctuation.
>I call Men Women...
>That threw me right out of the poem, and it's not what you want a reader to
>read, but there it is on the page. This is the sort of thing that
>punctuation was invented to prevent, I think.
>Kind regards,
> grasshopper
>
>
>----- Original Message -----
>From: "Ryfkah *" <[log in to unmask]>
>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>Sent: Sunday, May 30, 2004 5:24 PM
>Subject: [THE-WORKS] New: Daisies
>
>
> > Daisies
> >
> > The cemetery stands still
> > like the monument to death it is
> > Red white and blue color the green
> > Ghost soldiers sit by gravesides
> > wait for war to be no more
> >
> > I call Men Women you died
> > for my freedom
> >
> > They stare their sorrow
> > A Black Civil War hero
> > grins spits vapor
> > A WW1 casualty
> > points a finger
> > Another from WW2
> > bows his face in hands
> > From the Korean conflict
> > a nurse holds the hands
> > of invisible suffering
> > My brother who died
> > in Vietnam looks at my
> > naivete as a great grand
> > parent views a newborn
> > A Desert Storm trooper
> > sits alone and shakes his head
> >
> > From the Iraqi war an eighteen
> > year old sighs
> > and flips the peace sign
> >
> > I plant daisies on
> > an unknown soldier's
> > resting place
> >
> > Ryfkah 5/30/04
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