Dear Bob, I don't think the first two lines are too poetic really. I would
rather say they were probably too abstract a bit bizzarre to compare a tree
full of blossom to a knitted garment with a pattern or a brides dress ands
veil.
I was trying to explained in a poetic way (true) about nature reproduction
and suffeing through the seasons of late spring and winter.
I do think the first two lines set the pace of the poem and is the whole
meaning behind it I thought I was going in there rather obliquelly.
They were two lines that came into my head so I just worked on them and let
my imagination or subconsciouse take over. The location is where I live, and
the trees are covered with blossom which looks like snow but I was not
really concerned with the location.
Rather the fact that a brides veil can fall to the ground just like the
snow.
There are aspects in the poem of viginity and purity the loss of this of
reproduction amd also suffering when the veil and the snow has fallen to the
ground, Bw Sally J



>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub Hawthorn Blossom
>Date: Sun, 30 May 2004 11:01:40 +0000
>
>Hi Sally,
>This may just be me but the first 2 lines sound far too poetic for a poem!
>It might be that I want an extra line before these two...
>It might be that I want to see a picture before it's all starting to get
>explained to me... and the title is trying to do that but I want something
>far more specific. Maybe, to misqute tone-deaf-Tony Blur: location,
>location, location!
>Bob
>Who's just returned to the north from a south where the hawthorn blossom's
>now almost spent! But, if I'd written about it, I'd want to say just where
>I
>saw I was so I could catch a clear glimpse of the blossom I was writing
>about.
>
>
>>From: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: new sub Hawthorn Blossom
>>Date: Fri, 28 May 2004 17:11:18 +0100
>>
>>Hawthorn Blossom
>>
>>Blossom drops like loose stitches
>>from the knitted garment of life
>>a pattern of secrets
>>woven into the whole
>>falling like love lost
>>and lace petals
>>from the bridal dress
>>twig needles click in the wind
>>and branches cradle a soft green gown
>>make way for fruit yet to be born
>>blackbirds nest in the hawthorn
>>sing in the filigree of blossom and leaves
>>each bird their own song
>>their breasts not pierced like the robin
>>whose single chirp
>>can be heard only in the thorns of winter
>>when snow is the cloak that covers
>>melts in the varying light
>>instead of a falling to the earth
>>like the loose veil of May.
>>
>>
>>sally james
>>
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