Hi James Thanks for comments. I agree it is simply written and it is a
narrative poem but is written from a child's perspective as she remembers
days gone by. The last four lines are more sophisticated than the rest of
the poem these wtitten from the grown up perspective on reflection.. bw
Sally J
>From: James Bell <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub Nanny and the Archers
>Date: Tue, 25 May 2004 11:44:34 +0000
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>Hi Sally,
>I found most of this on the level of reportage and felt the poem did not
>begin to be effective until the last four lines. Perhaps rather than a
>purely narrative approach those last, very good lines, could be the start
>of something good, as the song says. Hope this is helpful.
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>bw
>James
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>>From: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: new sub Nanny and the Archers
>>Date: Sun, 23 May 2004 10:53:16 +0100
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>>Nanny and the Archers
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>>Long before Coronation Street
>>nanny listened to the Archers
>>Everything seemed to stop
>>at the same time every evening
>>the clocked ticked slower
>>and the sun set his fixed stare
>>through the front window
>>Nanny’s knitting cuddled her knee
>>and the mystery novel laughed
>>with her reading glasses on the front page
>>I sat cross-legged on the peg rug
>>noted my Sunday best in the middle pattern
>>listened to every word the box murmured
>>Nanny’s wrinkles made patterns on her face
>>and once I saw a tear stick in a narrow groove
>>her brown eyes dance in the coal’s light
>>and the bones of her fingers
>>shake the china saucer
>>I would sit in the half lotus position
>>till the last la di da di da da faded
>>and the click of the knob signalled
>>my silence could end
>>Nanny is not here anymore
>>but the Archers can still bend my bow
>>send the arrows flying to her memory
>>as straight as her grip on my childhood.
>>
>>sally james
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