Hi James, I remember this from a few months or is it weeks back, Time passes
so quickly these days. My local library is near a church and there is a
bench there too in some gardens which over look the road so this is easy to
picture.
I think in the second verse you could do wiith punctuation after signals or
maybe start a new line with "he would prefer.... etc and also "now" could be
omitted on the next line I think. I like the last verse  can visulise the
man. bw sallyj


>From: James Bell <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Man On The Bench
>Date: Tue, 25 May 2004 11:35:17 +0000
>
>Nice to be back. I missed you all. Here's one about somebody I wrote about
>before. I'm light on punctuation at present as its a first draft from the
>note book and the form may change too. Comments very welcome.
>
>MAN ON THE BENCH
>
>The man who used to sit
>on a bench outside the library on sunny days
>has now forsaken that location
>has moved to a bench outside the parish church
>and sits there under trees
>that in late spring
>give good leaf shade from the sun
>
>He ignores all who pass
>gives out signals he would prefer not
>to speak and talk about this drastic move
>and lack of motivation to now sit in the sun.
>
>Maybe its the nearness to the church
>or just a sudden aversion to the sun -
>but he now appears not anxious about anything
>does not hold his hands open on the long skinny length
>of his lap with eyes closed as if in prayer
>but sits with eyes like slits as if
>even dylight of any sort is too bright.
>
>
>
>bw
>James
>
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