Hi Christina,
I liked this in a funny sort of way as humour and an aside. Another part of
me felt it was a little deliberate and contrived and could see the seams, if
you know what I mean. Just a little below par for you. Sorry I'm being a
little negative on my return.
bw
James
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: The Song of Chassy
>Date: Mon, 24 May 2004 07:19:18 EDT
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> The Song of Chassy
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> The mechanic took me to his garage ---
> I was mind blown. His methods were sharper
> than all the manuals'.
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> I'm thick but willing. Show me your tool kit,
> lend me your pliers; I'll round off your bolt heads
> as well as any man.
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> Don't look at the muck on my fingers:
> your mates are gutted: I oiled their sump pans
> but forgot to oil my own.
>
> You're so cool, so incredible. Your teeth
> are that fan's viscous couplings, your engine
> revs my cells. Look, you're cool and fantastic:
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> your grip's the tyre of a Mclaren Mercedes
> burning the bend at Brand's Hatch.
> Your body's pure carbon fibre
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> and your finish is super sleek and smooth.
> Fill me up, be my pace car and I'll chase you.
> You're ace. Let's spin wheels...
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> christina fletcher
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