Hi Sally E Thanks for your crits. I think I will keep the ending after all
as it was essential to me writing the poem in the first place as nanny did
have a big influnce on my life but do agree it could end" and my silence
would end". Thanks. Watch out there may be other nanny poems coming soon. BW
Sally J
>From: Sally Evans <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub Nanny and the Archers
>Date: Sun, 23 May 2004 18:48:45 +0100
>
>Sally this is a super poem with a very good ending!
>bw
>SallyE
>
>on 23/5/04 10:53 am, Sally James at [log in to unmask] wrote:
>
> > Nanny and the Archers
> >
> > Long before Coronation Street
> > nanny listened to the Archers
> > Everything seemed to stop
> > at the same time every evening
> > the clocked ticked slower
> > and the sun set his fixed stare
> > through the front window
> > Nanny’s knitting cuddled her knee
> > and the mystery novel laughed
> > with her reading glasses on the front page
> > I sat cross-legged on the peg rug
> > noted my Sunday best in the middle pattern
> > listened to every word the box murmured
> > Nanny’s wrinkles made patterns on her face
> > and once I saw a tear stick in a narrow groove
> > her brown eyes dance in the coal’s light
> > and the bones of her fingers
> > shake the china saucer
> > I would sit in the half lotus position
> > till the last la di da di da da faded
> > and the click of the knob signalled
> > my silence could end
> > Nanny is not here anymore
> > but the Archers can still bend my bow
> > send the arrows flying to her memory
> > as straight as her grip on my childhood.
> >
> > sally james
> >
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