Dear Sally,
Forgive me for re-opening a can of worms, but I don't see that this poem is
improved by the lack of punctuation, -in fact I think it suffers by the
omission.
It may be just me, but I tend to feel that, with a very few exceptions,
poems benefit from standard punctuation. Without it, they can look almost
amateurish, and for me, I must admit, they seem old-fashioned.
Also I feel the structure of the poem is rather 'jotty', if you know what I
mean, and I think it would be better if you considered the relation of the
lines in terms of parts of a sentence, as it reads oddly in places eg
unwritten words
slashes like a sword
Punctuation could clear up the relation between lines like this. Also, it's
free -LOL.
Can I ask the people who read a lot of contemporary published poetry: How
many established poets dispense with punctuation nowadays? I see a lot of
non-punctuation on online workshops, but rarely from the 'poetic
'establishment'. Is this a mistaken impression?
Kind regards,
grasshopper
----- Original Message -----
From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, May 18, 2004 3:23 PM
Subject: [THE-WORKS] new sub Silence
> Silence
>
> Silence is not golden
> it pierces like a thorn
> unwritten words
> slashes like a sword
> unspoken words
> nails to a cross
> Silence is red.
>
> sally james
>
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