Hi Sally,
I had the same problem as Christina with continuity.
Should it be slash rather than slashes, and nail rather than nails?
I also wondered whether the poem could run on from the title word, so that
the first actual line is "is not golden"?
But I'm nit-picking because I think this is a really succinct, direct piece
and worth sticking with. I like the way the first and last lines are linked,
especially.
Regards,
Matt

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Silence

Silence is not golden
it pierces like a thorn
unwritten words
slashes like a sword
unspoken words
nails to a cross
Silence is red.

sally james

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