Hi Christina, Yes you are right I have amended the poem and changed a few
words around I changed slashes to slash. See amended poem on reply to
Ryfkah. bw Sally J
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub Silence
>Date: Wed, 19 May 2004 05:06:28 EDT
>
>Hiya, Sally. What trips me up at the moment is the continuity. I wonder
>whether slashes like a sword is its own thought or whether it belongs to
>the
>first or third line? Should it be slash or slashes? I like the link
>between the
>first and last line and, as usual, it comes across as very real.
>bw
>c
>
> > Silence
> >
> > Silence is not golden
> > it pierces like a thorn
> > unwritten words
> > slashes like a sword
> > unspoken words
> > nails to a cross
> > Silence is red.
> >
> > sally james
> >
>
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