Shalom Sally,
Your poem rings with the bell of truth. I wonder if you need to tell the
reader the adage about silence being golden but then your last line with red
parallels the color in line one. May I use this in my middle school poetry class?
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 05/18/2004 7:35:23 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< Silence
Silence is not golden
it pierces like a thorn
unwritten words
slashes like a sword
unspoken words
nails to a cross
Silence is red.
sally james >>
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