hi,
i like both versions i've read, but honestly prefer
the first. for me, this one looses something overall
and that feels most obvious in the last few lines. But
consider that i feel as if i'm loosing first draft
essentials in my current edits, so this may just be
mirroring. Either way, thnaks for a good read.
later
calaya
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