Thanks Christina will work on this and make the poets more elusive in the
first stanza and less directly phrased, Bw Sally J
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: Hebden Bridge in May
>Date: Thu, 13 May 2004 07:24:46 EDT
>
>I think this works better without the first stanza, Sally. Trouble with
>the
>first is it feels a bit ordinary but the second's much more personal. The
>first stanza will only mean something to people who know who you're talking
>about
>but the title brings them immediately to mind anyway, so it's more subtle
>to
>those who know and less obscure to those who don't.
>What do you reckon?
>bw
>c
>
> > Hebden Bridge in May
> >
> > Did Ted walk these streets
> > am I standing where he once stood
> > did Sylvia shed tears near this stream
> > did the shops beckon quietly
> > or was it the moors, the heath
> > the steep grassy slopes
> > that held them in their grasp?
> >
> > There is a kind of peace here
> > a new age charm that billows
> > around my skirt
> > there is a pulse in the air
> > as soft as their whispers
> > a hint of sadness flavours the cobbles
> > and poetry dances from forgotten footsteps
> > Blossom drips here now
> > from newer branches
> > falls like confetti
> > around my ankles.
> >
> > Sally James
>
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