hi cs
i like the was this reads
without the last line.
maybe i don't get it?
maybe the last line is the title?
either way, i find the phrase "all around the same
pattern" distracting and i've *ed a few words below
that also sound, to me, distracting.
later
calaya
Relay-race with changing batons -
a flower *deposited in the womb of autumn,
contemplation *vivified as snow over a mountain,
waves trying to define the ocean,
all around the same pattern - hesitant and broken.
Need a circle always be vicious?--
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