> >Bondage.
> >Helen Clare
> >
> >After all the kinks we've rolled through
> >we reach the last - yours to zip
> >and leave and mine to slit
> >my chest and hold the flaps apart for you
Wow. This is a brilliant metaphor. I could wish that the scansion
were more tight and the rhyme sharper in order to make this as crisp
and memorable as it could be. Line three is missing a beat and line
four has an extra one. Have you considered, since the last line is
so powerful, making the other lines also pentameter to match it?
Marcus
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