> Hello Sally,
Many thanks for your feedback on this one. I´ll give your comments careful consideration.
Best wishes, Mike
> Lähettäjä: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
> Päiväys: 2004/04/19 ma PM 09:33:07 GMT+03:00
> Vastaanottaja: [log in to unmask]
> Aihe: Re: New sub: At Dawn
>
> This is very imaginitive. As a former nurse I envisage the orchid just below
> the heart, a flower being born. Someone blossoming into life. Many
> possibilties for the minds interpretation here, Not so sure about "vegetable
> world though." Maybe world is enough. And also not so sure of "streaked
> purple and yellow". The dawn sky should work on its own. I was up early this
> morning and saw the dawn but it was very grey and not very exiting where I
> live. Sally J
>
>
> >From: Mike Horwood <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: New sub: At Dawn
> >Date: Mon, 19 Apr 2004 15:33:08 +0300
> >
> >At Dawn
> >
> >I never wanted this, the heart pumping,
> >blood punishing the veins in thin wrists.
> >
> >The skin below my ribs parts and tears
> >and the orchid pushes its silky stem
> >at the wound´s livid lips,
> >stretching flaps of flesh
> >into a red-raw O.
> >
> >Orchis raises his headbud,
> >dislodging cells like grains of soil,
> >rippling my belly and I cannot look
> >away, though the starting day lights
> >the vegetable world outside my window
> >and streaks the dawn sky.
> >
> >Could I rise and step out, barefoot,
> >on the cool grass beneath the trees?
> >
> >I lie back on my pillow in single
> >contemplation of the orchid blooming
> >below my heart, streaked purple and yellow,
> >lurid as any sky at dawn
> >and imagine the feel of cool grass on bare feet.
> >
> >
> >
> >Mike
> >
> >
>
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