Looks like I got it all wrong. Oh dear. Sally J
>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub : Archery (Sally, M)
>Date: Fri, 16 Apr 2004 14:55:38 +0000
>
>Hi Sally, Christina, grasshopper,
>
>Yeh, I'm with what you're getting at too, Christina! For me it's as if the
>poem's said something striking but in the last stanza it's as if it's
>floundering around trying to find an ending!
>The porcupine image really stands out too starkly and distracts.
>It might well be that readers can infer the pain, wounds, without them
>having to be described... Why else have the bones being shook at the chubby
>little menace to our feelings?
>Bob
>Who's seen plenty of plastic cupids but no plastic porcupines!
>And who's going to a reading tonight where the tickets cost £10! I don't
>think I've ever paid that much before... so I know of the pain of poetry!
>
>
>>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: Re: New sub : Archery (Sally, M)
>>Date: Fri, 16 Apr 2004 06:37:42 EDT
>>
>>Interesting how we all react differently to the same words, eh, Sally. It
>>gives me problems for several reasons. Using porcupined as a verb is
>>certainly
>>original but, for me, it sticks out (so to speak) as an invention and
>>feels
>>artificial. It also conjures a very strong image of the animal in my
>>mind.
>>Perhaps, if I'd ever been stabbed by a porcupine quill, I'd relate to the
>>pain
>>rather than the visual image, which is much more to do with the animal
>>itself
>>than the pain it might inflict. So I find it difficult to deal with this
>>after
>>the tremendously convincing, original bones/runes image. What the poem
>>leaves
>>me with at the moment is the business of playing with language and a
>>rather
>>agitated little chap in the grass. Runes/bones leaves me with an emotion.
>>It's all horses for courses. Perhaps it's good to have such conflicting
>>reactions.
>>bw
>>c
>>
>> > Gosh I really liked the last two lines Christina as it sums up the pain
>>of
>> > the arrows entering the body metaphysically of course. A broken heart
>>is a
>> > gut feeling and the pain is almost physical. SallyJ
>>
>
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