Christine at the moment I am writing the first thing that comes to my mind
and the title isn't right I knew it as soon as I had posted it. When I have
MS symptons my thoughts get mixed up and I am writing about two poems in my
head at the same time. One of the compensations of MS is i get quite
creative as well as confused.You are right about deleting the fifth line, To
be honest it was your doggie poem that inspired me. Thanks for
encouragement, Sally J
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub returned to sender
>Date: Thu, 15 Apr 2004 10:47:19 EDT
>
>I did enjoy this, Sally but I'm not sure that I fully understood on account
>of the title. It could imply that the sender gets the stinking fish back
>and I
>rather doubt that's the intention. How about 'Gone Off' instead, or maybe
>even just 'Off'? Or something along those lines if that's what you mean.
>Or do
>you mean that you send something fresh only to have the same thing sent
>back
>in a less than fresh state? I don't think so on account of the penultimate
>line. What about deleting the fifth line and breaking the stanza on the
>fourth?
> The poem's addressed to the person you're sending the fish to and I think
>the reader would have fun working out what was going on. But oh, I do like
>it!
>More power to your pixels, Sally. Bravo!
>bw
>christina
>
> > Returned to sender
> >
> > It is Easter and I wanted to give you an egg
> > a chocolate one, wrapped in silver, tied with a ribbon of red
> > and for your breakfast, an egg, newly laid
> > still warm from the hen
> > But because I don't see you anymore
> > I will give you a fish instead
> > I bought one fresh from the market this morning
> > Its eyes are bright and its scales jeweled with sea
> > It smelled of oceans and coconut islands
> > when I sent it today
> > I wrapped it in foil with kisses and love
> > You should recieve it soon
> > But someone said you had gone away for a week.
> >
> > Sally james
>
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