Thank you for your comments.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 04/13/2004 12:48:27 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< Hi Ryfkah
This is very interesting... the comparison between the image on the TV
screen and the painting. I'm not sure that the transition in the last stanza
happens quite smoothly enough. It's maybe a show not tell thing. The dots
dancing on the tv screen, the news presenter etc, rather than explaining to
the reader what is happening.
Best wishes
H >>
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