> Hello Ryfkah,
Many thanks for your feedback. I´ll give some thought to paring.
best wishes, Mike
> Lähettäjä: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
> Päiväys: 2004/04/05 ma PM 07:22:19 GMT+03:00
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> Aihe: Re: New sub: Ripples
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> I like the extended metaphor a great deal.
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> I wonder if you could pare down phrases such as "that had lain dormant"?
>
> kol tuv, Ryfkah
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