Heya, James,
don't ya just love/hate "it"
when "it" is "This
is as it happened
just as I was writing
another poem
down by the river"
I appreciate this. I think it's brave and strong enuff
to stand a tweak. May I? Thanks in advance for letting
me play with you. FYI, most of my tweak driven by an
urge to make the reading encounter brief
to mirror the image of the *real encounter,and
lessen the conversational tone, hopefully. I say, Aim
for a tone that sounds more fitting for "virtual"
reality: fine lines, if you will; lines that sound
likely in VR- you could mirror the fine lines between
cliche and fresh? Know what I mean? good luck.
later
calaya
VIRTUAL REALITY
Guy with the long red hair
talked to himself,
shouted: "the way to philosophy I prefer
and is food for the seagulls."
Asked what I wrote.
"Your autobiography," I said,
"in code".
He agreed,and added,
"You must be crazy."
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