I think this is a good poem I have fiddled with the first stanza I hope you
don't mind and think the rest needs working on too to make it tighter and
the message more astute I think the last line is super. bw Sally J
>From: James Bell <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub:The Tall Thin Man
>Date: Mon, 22 Mar 2004 13:46:20 +0000
>
>This is a rough cut from the notebook. I'd be interested in what you think.
>
>THE TALL THIN MAN
>
>I missed the tall thin man today
>who sits on a bench outside
>the library on good days
>basks in the sun
>raises his head to receive its rays
>extends his arms
his hands open
>as if he somehow prays light
>to be on him
>The difference between life and death.
>
>There have been many non-sun days.
>
>This is a good week day sun day
>with no cloud - though cold.
>
>His bench in the sun is empty
>
>though kids on skateboards
>and bikes are here
>
>friends and families walk
>and talk
>
>though no true sunworshipper today-
>
>maybe the darkness got him.
>
>
>bw
>James
>
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