Great last line - feels both tongue in cheek and poignant.
I'd like to see lines 10 onwards made up to the standard of the first part
to do it justice.
T
-----Original Message-----
From: The Pennine Poetry Works [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf
Of James Bell
Sent: 22 March 2004 13:46
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Subject: New sub:The Tall Thin Man
This is a rough cut from the notebook. I'd be interested in what you think.
THE TALL THIN MAN
I missed the tall thin man today
who sits on a bench outside
the public library on good days
and basks in the sun
raises his head to receive its rays
extends his arms his hands open
as if he somehow prays -
light like this looks to be to him
the difference betwen life and death.
There have been many non-sun days.
This is a good week day sun day
with no cloud - though cold.
His bench in the sun is empty
though kids on skateboards
and bikes are here
friends and families walk
and talk
though no true sunworshipper today-
maybe the darkness got him.
bw
James
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