Thanks Bob, I was fed up and just wrote the poem without really thinking
properly it does need snip snip snipping in parts I agree. I haven't written
much for ages so was just wondering if I could still do it, So maybe more tp
follow soon. Sally J
>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: In The Library
>Date: Fri, 19 Mar 2004 16:15:15 +0000
>
>Hi Sally,
>Great to read one of your poems again - but not so great of me to take so
>long in replying!
>I like it!
>... But (ah - there ought to be a word for the poetry critic's "but"!) I
>was
>wondering about all the lines at the start of it... the:
>The library is busy with computers click clicking
>old and young tap dance the key boards
>books waltz on the shelfs
>even the the videos are jiving
>all has to be read before the poem really begins to happen (with you
>sitting
>between two men!).
>I guess we need to know the place was busy, I guess the play between the
>public and the private is part of the poem, but... (snip-snip...)
>Bob
>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>Silence Please
>>>
>>>The library is busy with computers click clicking
>>>old and young tap dance the key boards
>>>books waltz on the shelfs
>>>even the the videos are jiving
>>>and I sat between two men
>>>write a poem off the cuff
>>>it slivered down my left arm
>>>from the hole in my heart
>>>were poetry emerges
>>>like the newborn
>>>enters cyberspace
>>>where angels sit on the
>>>mother board and scream.
>>>
>>>Sally James
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
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