Hi Sirrus,
I'm having great trouble getting my e-mail to send a reply to The Works
regarding your e-mail!
Hope this attempt comes through! Maybe that's because of the formatting
you've used - that my "Reply" button can't cope with! I also can't get your
original message to appear below mine! (I guess my e-mail system's at fault
- it can't cope with yours... but it's OK with everyone elses!). Anyway...
(4th different attempt today!)
What I've been trying to say for a couple of days is that this is a
mega-long piece. I guess some people (and me!) may be picking and chosing -
and, therefore, focusing on individual parts more than the whole! Different
poems need different ways of reading. I haven't found it easy to say "I like
this and this, but not that and that!" because I also keep thinking, "The
sum is probably greater than the parts..."
I find, looking at the piece as a whole, I'm sometimes irritated by your
line-breaks! The piece as a whole seems to work with regular lines that say
things completely and then I find myself being confused by a line that
appears incomplete. I guess it's a bit like me reading some speeches from,
say, the early Shakespeare plays and then finding a speech from The Tempest
being inserted! How different would it be if it all worked with a regular
pattern of autonomous lines?
It's an interesting sequence, tho. Almost a "Cowabunga" of a sequence! A
chap-book, pamphlet, of a sequence.
Bob

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