Hi Gary,
I'd prefer this to begin with the line:
"The calls I heard as doves..."
and I'd miss out the title "Crows" - and let the poem work as one poem.
Bob
who also can't understand:
"rabbits in fear they will be discovered
by squirrels hiding in the second growth."
possibly because he doesn't know enough about how rabbits and squirrels live
and how they don't get on with each other!
Bob, thanks. The line Crows deleted.
As for the rabbits and squirrels, a bit of whimsey.
Smiles.
Gary
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