Hi Gary,
I'd prefer this to begin with the line:
"The calls I heard as doves..."
and I'd miss out the title "Crows" - and let the poem work as one poem.
Bob
who also can't understand:
"rabbits in fear they will be discovered
by squirrels hiding in the second growth."
possibly because he doesn't know enough about how rabbits and squirrels live
and how they don't get on with each other!
>From: Gary Blankenship <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: White Doves in Mourning corrected
>Date: Sat, 13 Mar 2004 08:10:20 -0800
>
>The no was there once, honest.
>
>White Doves in Mourning
>
>I no longer hear the doves,
>their soft mournful call
>no longer echoes from
>the second growth
>that leads towards the Sound.
>
>There were never doves.
>
>The calls I heard as doves
>where no doves live or nest
>were most likely common pigeons
>stray cats or owls,
>schoolchildren bullying smaller children,
>traffic noise and garbage trucks,
>rabbits in fear they will be discovered
>by squirrels hiding in the second growth.
>
>Crows.
>
>There were no doves,
>only crows returned
>from northern climates
>in time for starling nesting,
>dandelions and spring plums.
>
>There are no crows.
>
>There are only explosions,
>another in the sand,
>another even Lorca
>would be at loss to understand.
>
>Such doves as there are mourn
>as I watch crows chase
>night birds across a pewter sky
>and pigeon wings litter city streets.
>
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